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August 31, 2023 · Source: Medium

My hands.

I have long fingers,

342 words
Voice6
Lyric intensity7
The line8
Mind under feeling7
Held shape8
Literary mean 7.2 / 10

Highlights

A neck with a bump behind, weighted by the heaviness of my brain.
The line

Voice

The rhythmic repetition of "long fingers" establishes a direct, unvarnished persona.

Lyric intensity

Concrete specifics like "half a bottle of nail paint" create vivid scale.

Mind under feeling

Transitions well from physical inventory to examining how trauma maps onto anatomy.

Held shape

Successful circularity; the ending returns to scale after the Plath diversion.

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